太极武者NO1
The perfect holiday The last vacation I go by car the shandong, there is very beautiful. There are a lot of mountain, water. I and family together go to the zoo, there's a lot of animals, they are very lovely. We had also happy. I like it here. I hope to have the chance to play there
俺是陆军PLA
我稍微给你改动了改动，因为说实话，你的中文也不怎么通。。。而且太流水账了。。。小学的作文吧。如果想高级一点儿，可以用where或者which连接一下。We went to beautiful Shandong for last holiday. There were rivers and mountains everywhere. And I went to zoo with my family.We saw a lot of cute animals.It was a happy trip. I really like there and hope to go there again if i have chance.
龙龙1004
Last year, I went, together with my parents, to tour Tai Mountain in Shandong Province.
