美丽依然张
talk with youmakes you want to sing那句可以把makes 去掉,重复动词了后面那句the world feels like 很奇怪,明白你想表达的意思,但是用英语这么说很奇怪,一般只有人feels like吧。可以换成the world seems to be a better place.overcome them其他感觉很好啊祝你演讲成功!
土耳其电信
语法上好多错误(特别多comma slice,就是该分新句子的时候本该用period却用了comma)。例如,It was the best of time, it was the worst of time, it was the age of faith and eagerness , it was the age of academic freedom. 这是四句话,必须4个句号。非要写在一起的话It was the best of time and also the worst of time. ( best of time?? best time??)It was the age of faith and eagerness and also the age of academic freedom.再比如这个It was the best of time, because of academic freedom , (that) Countless of famous faculties, remarkable scholars and brilliant scientists have(had?) emerged and gone through the current of time. (It was the best of time, )because of academic freedom , (that) the campuses of universities became a sacred place where these thirsty minds could pursuit for knowledge and truth , a peaceful place where different opinions could exist in harmony, (and) a righteous place where upright professors and honest students could stand up and call on peace and democracy out of their conscience and patriotic hearts.(我跳着读的,中间自己想办法吧)In the year 1949 像这种东西直接in 1949更好听In 1949, the communists founded (P)eople (R)epublic of (C)hina , once they did give us citizens hope. (However,) it was a hope consisted of lies and falsehoods , and the truth is that China has never enjoyed real academic freedom (true academic freedom? real是指现实的) since 1949, not even during (the) more recent decades in which the government has carried out economic reform.(逻辑上是不是怪怪的,since 1949就代表到现在,干嘛还要not even,但非要强调的话 .... )(这也是很严重的语法错误)(With) No more thoughtful students , we are all forced to have too many brain-washing courses. (With )No more creativity scholars, they are all pretty busy plagiarizing academic theories....或者这样可能好听点,Without thoughtful students any more, we are all forced...还有小错误像creativity scholars,应该是creative scholars.这样小错误我没有一个个看,你自己认真检查吧But I do believe, although I don't expect to have the opportunity to witness, that this situation will be changed (。)The brightness of liberalization will once again light up the path,(and) academic freedom will once again shepherd us through the valley of darkness , as long as we still have conscience and faith.感觉这篇文章完全是用中国语法写的。英文句子要想写的好听,长句子是必然要的,但更要注意有长有短,比如2长一短,这样读起来会比较流畅。PS:很多句子我都跳过了没读
yf只想依赖祢
给下列评分,(1 至 7 分; 1 低,7 高)摘要的质量 5 与会议的相关性 5介绍与激励 5对“最新颖技术”的呈献 6 自己作业阐述的独创性 5结果的陈述 4结论及未来的工作 5可读性,英语水平 4数据 的质量 5格式的质量 4对整体文章的推荐 (1至7;1 强烈拒绝,7 绝对接受 )接受为一般文章 5注: 还算是不错的评价回答下列问题规模(1 - 7,1低和7高) 质量的文摘:5 相关会议:5 介绍和动机:5 提交 国家的艺术 :6 描 述的原创性的贡献:5 演示的结果:4 结论和未来的 工作:5 可读性 质量的英语:4 质量的数字:5 质量 的格式:4 整体论文推荐(1 - 7,1强烈反对,7强接受) 接受 普通纸:5
半透明SKY也
management rules of producing access to new energyvehicles (inviting to suggestions)