xiao叶子0118
Secondly, my bedroom was design by my mother and my bedroom looks like princess’s room.designed 要用被动态 the princess’s room. 加冠词Thirdly, I have my bedroom four years这个语法上有点怪，用完成时好一点：Thirdly, I have stayed in my bedroom for four yearsI have a deep love for it这话好像用得不太地道：I love it deeplyI stay at thereat不用,here ,there前都不加介词However I’m sad, happy, blue, hopeless, I sleep in my princess’s bed. 楼主应该是想说无论我快乐伤感吧，用错了,另情感的词一一对应会比较好：whether I’m sad or happy, Joyful or hopeless，I sleep in my princess’s bed. talk with my friends in the phone介词用0non the phone...是指打电话这个动作...例如: I am on the phone with my friend.(我正在和朋友打电话)而in the phone则是强调在电话里的对话内容...例如: She told me something in the phone. (她在电话里告诉我一些事情)Finally, I think I can do anything what I want to dowhat不对，用which或that,这是定语从句I love my bedroom, I love my personal place, I love my free place逗号全变成句号或者分号。逗号不能连接两个句子
似曾相识SaMa
1. Friend relationships can take different forms, but it is usual for close friends (此处加to) share similar ideas and interests. It generally take（改为takes） time to reach this point. And the closest（应为closer） people become, the more they rely on one other（应为another. People want to do friends favours and（改为but） hate to break a promise.2. The elephant is (此处加the) largest living land animal and one of the cleverest, and yet elephants are rather easy (改为easily) captured. They are very near_sight(改为near-sighted) and can not see anything clearly unless it is close to them. Hunter(改为Hunters) take advantage of this to get near the elephant which they are(去掉are) wish to capture.
NightWish431
Firstly, I love pink and my mother print my bedroom pink. So I love my lovely bedroom. Secondly, my bedroom was designed by my mother and my bedroom looked like princess’s room. Thirdly, I keep stay with my bedroom four years and I have a deeply love for it. In spring, summer, autumn, winter, I stay there. How I’m sad, happy, blue, hopeless, I sleep in my princess’s bed. So I love everything in my bedroom. Finally, I think I can do anything what I want to do. I can dance, sing songs, shout, sleep, surf at the Internet, watch TV, talk with my friends on the phone, read books and so on. I think my bedroom can give me freedom. I love my bedroom, I love my personal place, I love my free place.
爱我大兴
(First), I love pink and my mother print my bedroom pink. So I love my lovely bedroom. (Second), my bedroom was design by my mother and my bedroom looks like princess’s room. (Third), I have my bedroom four years, I have a deep love for it. In spring, summer, autumn, winter, I stay at there. However I’m sad, happy, blue, hopeless, I sleep in my princess’s bed. So I love everything in my bedroom. Finally, I think I can do anything what I want to do. I can dance, sing songs, shout, sleep, surf the Internet, watch TV, talk with my friends in the phone, read books and so on. I think my bedroom can give me freedom. I love my bedroom, I love my personal place, I love my free place.
微笑的可爱多
一 1.share 前加to2.interests 改为 interestes3.take 改为 takes4. become 前加 they5.one 改为 each二，1.largest 前加the2.cleverest hou 加animals3. easy 改为 easily4.take 改为takes5.去掉wish 前的are4.
咂咂咂1
Friend relationships can take different forms,but it is usual for close friends (to)share similar ideas and interests.It generally take(takes) time to reach this point. And the closest(closer) people become,the more they rely on one(each) other.People want to do friends favours(favouritely)and hate to break a promise.(共五处错误)第二篇：The elephant is (the)largest living land animal and one of the cleverest, and yet elephants are rather easy captured.They are very near_sight(near_sighted) and can not see anything clearly unless it is close to them .Hunter take(takes) advantage of this to get near (to) the elephant which they are(去掉are) wish to capture.(共五处错误)
